Saturday, April 2, 2011

In Which I Participate In A Contest

As mentioned on Thursday, Shelley Watters from Is It Hot in Here or is it This Book? is having a followers contest where you post your pitch on your blog today or yesterday, and enter in a chance to win a full manuscript request from SUZIE TOWNSEND.

Yeah, that's right.

The pitch could only be 140 characters (ie twitter) so I had some advanced thesaurus usage to get mine down 16 characters, but here it is!

Title: Glimpse of Another Shore
Genre: YA Fantasy
Wordcount: 56,000

Pitch: In a land where one family member must join the navy in the war effort, Pier rescues a sea serpent and finds a way to save his home from war



There's a linky on her blog if you're interested in seeing the rest of the entries, otherwise you can check the comments on her blog tomorrow for all the entered pitches.

Now I'm off to play some racquetball, where my racket "Wesley Crusher" and I are planning on dominating.

See you Monday!

13 comments:

aspiring_x said...

great pitch!!! wesley crusher always pissed me off! go jake sisco!!!! :)

Susan Oloier said...

I like the pitch and want to read more, but it is 175 characters long. Need to trim it a bit.

Suzi McGowen said...

It's great, but it is too long. Since traditionally names aren't used in pitches, you can take the name out, and maybe pull out "orphaned"?

Sarah Ahiers (Falen) said...

Aspiring - yeah, but it's an awesome name for a racket

Susan and Suzi - thanks for pointing that out - i had some blogger formatting issues this morning, and while trying to fix it, i must have accidentally pasted the wrong Pitch.
The correct one has been added. 140 characters on the dot

aspiring_x said...

oh! agreed. mos def an awesome name for a racket!

JEFritz said...

It's good, but I'm not sure the information about a family member having to join the navy is needed. What kind of world is this? Magical or contemporary or what? The idea sounds great, though. What kind of war is Pier saving his home from?

Read my books; lose ten pounds! said...

more please

Suzi McGowen said...

This one is good. Setting, MC, and possible conflict. Nice :)

Cheree said...

Nice pitch. You've got me interested.

Sarah Ahiers (Falen) said...

Thanks everyone! It's exciting to read all the fun pitches on Shelley's blog today

Al said...

neat and compact :-)

Anne said...

i was confused about the Pitch being too long, and then i saw you had updated it, so i was less confused.
having no experience with pitches, i can say that the use of the word 'war' twice in one sentence rubbed me the wrong way. but i have no idea how to get around that (especially with the character limit)
otherwise, i think it sums up the story really well.
also, how did i miss this post? did you sneak it in on me?

Sarah Ahiers (Falen) said...

Al - thanks!

Anne - it's been here since saturday, so it looks like maybe it's a personal problem...

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